In the corner of a house, in an old hole, was an old little mouse who saw a bit of cheese. But a big cat saw the mouse. The cat was on top of the cheese in the corner of the house. So, when the cat when to bed. The mouse snuck out. The mouse cradled under the cat and crabbed the cheese and ran to his hole. The mouse sat on his bed in the corner of is hole. Next morning the cat saw. cheese was gore. The cat sat in front the mouse. Hole and the mouse asleep.
Hi Jensen,
Well done on being successful using our technique of the week, beginning with a “Where Things Are” sentence. Your story was action-packed. One thing to improve on next time would be to use your editing time to reread yourself and ensure all of your story makes sense, as things got a little confusing towards the end, mostly due to punctuation (watch where to place those full stops!). Keep on writing!